News @ Penny Blog

Toward the end of National Poetry Month Betty Blog has my poem News. Subsequent revisions give:

News

He is coming,

the sky is clear,

it was beginning to rain

when the sun disappeared,

you had to have rain

before it got near.

First in the dark
Time altered its sleep.

Tree somber trunks

rhymed within, lined the rim,

twisted with drought,

quarreled with rock.

Noah town was beginning to set
for the city of heaven!

Moses said

Jesus was outside town

And Abraham and Angels

were flying around.

There was an exchange of the editor and a reader on Google groups about this and a later poem, The Branch: 

Today's poem on Penny's Poetry Blog:
The Branch, by AE Reiff

        When
   the Lord of All
descended into flesh,
   came through the
    million worlds
     into the one

[...]

http://gdancesbetty.blogspot.ca/2017/04/branch-ae-reiff.html

Rachel

4/14/17

oh wow, i thought that said the millions words...

it's not that i don't like you, george.

i just kinda forget to read your posts a lot.

but when i read them, sometimes it's really cool.

then sometimes i go to penny blog, and sometimes it just seems....endless....and other times, not my cup of tea.

maybe i should try more coffee... ;-)

George J. Dance

4/14/17

No problem. If there's so much going on on aapc that one can't stay on top of  everything and  in touch with everyone, that's a good thing; a sign that the group may be reviving.

Heh! Well, Mr. Reiff is not everyone's cup of tea; his poetry is mystical, and rather weird sometimes; but I like it because it is different from the p.d. stuff I normally post.

Here's an interesting bit of trivia: what attracted me to Mr. Reiff's first submission, years ago, were these lines:

First in the dark,
trees with somber trunks
rhymed within, lined the rim,
twisted with drought,
quarreled with rock.

which for some reason reminded me of Dylan.

Rachel

4/14/17

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no, i liked this one (the one you posted from today)

i also appreciate their brevity (let's see if this strattera ends up working... :-/ )

Will Dockery

4/14/17

Indeed... springtime is poetry time!

:)

George J. Dance

4/15/17

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Thanks; I'm glad you did. I thought you were criticizing it, but you were just explaining why you've ignored other posts of mine. Well, no explanation necessary; but thank you for offering one.

> i also appreciate their brevity

Thanks again. The brevity's important: I try to give readers a sample of each poem, to let them decide whether it's worth reading the whole thing or not.

> (let's see if this strattera ends up working... :-/ )

I had to look up "strattera" - it sounded like a literary term. :)

Rachel

4/15/17

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like literata ? :)

George J. Dance

4/15/17

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No, something like onomatopoeia or synecdoche; some obscure literary device, with an even-more-obscure (to me) name, that you detected in the poem.

Rachel

4/15/17

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oh okay.

i made it up, anyway. :)

Rachel

4/15/17

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that was a typo, i meant the million words...

i'm sorry. :-(((

George J. Dance

4/15/17

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Let me get this straight. You made a pun (a "million words", riffing off "million worlds," and I didn't get it.

Then you explained it ("sometimes i go to penny blog, and sometimes it just seems....endless"), and I still didn't get it.

Seems I'm the one having the "D'oh!" moment. And you're apologizing?

I like the fact that you're so kind (to me, anyway), but you're going above and beyond the call of kindness, here.

Rachel

4/15/17

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no, i never went to penny blog for THIS one. (a million worlds)

it wasn't a pun.

i misread it at first glance.

but i thought the play on words, i mean, it seemed to be replete/pregnant with meaning....(religious, biblical)